MY WOLF !Description!

[EpicAngel]

Name: Angel
Gender: Female
Age: 3 years.
Pack: loner
Rank: omega
Appearance: Angel is a white wolf. her coat has a tint of a creamy look to it. my stomach and inner side legs are a light creamy brown. a line down my back of a crisp brown that fades into white. each brown part of me is faded color. Angels eyes are a dark crisp brown, and the line down her tail is a light brown that has a bit of a yellow tint. my muzzle near my mouth and nose has a black tint around it.
Personality: Angel is friendly and very energetic when she gets to know someone. When Angel becomes annoyed she will break out in aggression and doesn't trust people as much. Angel is protective over food and other items and wont get along at first with others.
Short Bio: When angel was a pup she had a weak and a terrible past. Her life was at the Worst stage. Since she was the runt no one cared for her. she got everything last and food was the main one she got last. Angel had become very thin to the point her ribs was showing but no one cared. her two older siblings would exclude her out of games and would bite and growl if she came near. One day when Angel followed her older siblings into the woods and they betrayed her. When her mother came raging with anger and worried that she lost her pups, Angels siblings blamed her for leading them out there. angels mother Kicked angel out of the pack and when Angel tried crawling back she was threatened with snarls or growls to get away before they attacked. Angel wondered far deeper into the woods now as a older pup living on her own. She never learned to hunt so Angel went weeks without eating. Now as a Adult her past life gives her the aggression and no trust to others, even though she was not like that in the past.
RP Sample: the soft summer breeze blew, carrying pollen from the flowers that bloomed each year. angels fur was ruffled by the breeze, her tail swaying along with it. Angel glanced down at the landscape her eyes narrowing at the sight of something moving. Angel pads down the hill side in caution and question of what this might be.
Ranks are: Omega
* hoped you like it * forgot my appearence *

[NomCornWolf]

OMG My god, I love you already. You shall RP like a boss.

[Torm]

Gray, please don't post in creations unless you have something helpful to say ^ ^;

This is very well done, however please try to improve your spelling a bit while role playing. For example, instead of

"the soft summer breeze blew, carrying pollen from the flowers that bloomed each year. angels fur was ruffled by the breeze, her tail swaying along with it. Angel glanced down at the landscape her eyes narrowing at the sight of something moving. Angel pads down the hill side in caution and question of what this might be."

You'd add some punctuation and capitalization(As well as make sure you are role playing in past-tense)...

"The soft summer breeze blew, carrying pollen from the flowers that bloomed each year. Angels fur was ruffled by the breeze, her tail swaying along with it. Angel glanced down at the landscape, her eyes narrowing at the sight of something moving. Angel padded down the hill side in caution and question of what this might be."

(I put the changes in bold) You also don't need to put "Angel" at the start of every sentence. You could make it sound a bit better by putting words in representing her, like "She" or "The she-wolf", etc.

"The soft summer breeze blew, carrying pollen from the flowers that bloomed each year. Angels fur was ruffled by the breeze, her tail swaying along with it. She glanced down at the landscape, eyes narrowing at the sight of something moving. The wolf padded down the hill side in caution and question of what this might be."

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